On Sunday I did the Weetbix Tryathalon, I had lots of fun. The swim and bike was the best I am little weaker at the run. I could hear lots of people cheering me on. The swim was 100 metres for the 9 year old's and I am 9. It was tight in the pool and hard get space for yourself without touching all the other 9 year old's.
We had to bike 4 km that was the best part because I love biking. The only problem was that I kept on getting stuck behind people slower than me, and I couldn't get passed them.
Then was the run but, I only jogged because I was to tired to run I could see the finish line now but not very well. So I started to sprint as fast as I could to the finish line which I could now see very clearly! When I got to the finish line Irene Van Dyk gave me my meddle. Irene is one of my favorite netball stars! Then I played around with my friends and had a look at the stalls.
Great paragraphs on tis writing Adele. I also like the way you have used lots of different sentence beginnings.
ReplyDeleteChallenge:
Take a look at the second sentence. Is this one whole sentence or does it need to break up into two? Read it out loud to see.
Also, look at how to spell medal in the last paragraph.
Keep up this amazing writing. Imagine what your blog will look like at the end of the year!
Thanks Allana
DeleteI can't wait to see what my blog will look like at the end of the year to! The challenge will be fixed asap.
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Hi Adele
ReplyDeleteWell done even though I was there!
I think you need to look out for your spelling.
From Lucy
Adele - it is Saturday 2nd April, about 10 days after I made the 'Challenge' comment. You should fix the writing BEFORE you put anything new on the blog.
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Hi Adele
ReplyDeleteI love your story but what date was it on?
It sounds like fun
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thanks Aria
Deletegood idea to include the date
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